help for rping and examples to me

[furrynerd]

ok everyones been bothering me about rping skills. people join and rp so i can get help and to tell me exactly what to improve on.

[Dorian Longstreet]

I have a guide... go there.

[furrynerd]

if youve read what i said on hoshi ooc. im learning disabled. i have somethign called auditory processing. i need things to be interactive and expalined to me, thats what i mean.

[Dorian Longstreet]

Well then let's see,

You walk into a garden it bursts with countless colors of flowers and variations. It excites your senses with wonderful smells. What do you do

[furrynerd]

well id follow the scents. follow them on all fours. waits to see whats around this garden.

[Dorian Longstreet]

WRONG

You describe how the scents and the colors impact you. Describe it, point out the things that aren't mentioned, the vines the way they crawl up the gazebos DESCRIBE EVERYTHING YOU CAN.

[furrynerd]

so it should have been like. i walk around. see the reds,blue's,purple and other colored flowers. the smells of roses, forget me nots and the other variations. vines going througgh gazzebos swirling around.

[Dorian Longstreet]

Well... it's a start, what you have a problem with is detail mostly. Taking the time to really take in all the stuff you see, and put it down. Wrighting is all about creativity, and so you need to use your creative prowess to good use.

[furrynerd]

well im trying to remmber that detail. people were saying says and didnt know im learning disabled. so if anyelse will help like hoshi or anyone else.

[Dorian Longstreet]

They think your hopeless, they won't bother.

[Ekrance]

But i don't think that, i'll help you, look, i'll help you with the conversations of your characters. p. ex:

"Hey, what's up?" He said as he looked to the cat. That's an example, when you are going to talk, use "", and puntuation signs, "?" "!" "," "." and detail your messages, "He said looking at the cat" That's what your character is doing while talking, know what i mean?

[45dragoons]

i am learning disabled as well. so you cant pull that card... al it is is pratice.

[Ekrance]

We should make a private RP just for us and like that we could help you train Furrynerd =3

[furrynerd]

well this is the rp. well from dorian im learning detail. so whats everyone wanna work with me on. well i actual just started doing better on rp and thats what i mean i need to work on rps.

[Ekrance]

I see, then we should start

[Hoshiginiro]

im not helping so dont ask i have enough teaching to do with my own daughter with out having to teach some one how to role play

[furrynerd]

ok i was just thinking of a first person hoshi.

[furrynerd]

so lets start with my other things in rp i need. ekrance, dorian and anyone else.

[Silvador]

OK, furry, I'm going to give you some advise. There is one vital key to any kind of story writing, and that is detail. It's really not that hard to learn, you just need to stop looking at it as a major thing, it's not. Detail is like cents. Keeping saving the cent coins, don't think about the dollars, just put those 5's and 10's and 20's aside, and before you know it, you've got dollars piling up.

When writing details, try to focus on one thing at a time. Let's start with something simple, and don't fret too much over grammar, that can be worked on at a later date. I want you to describe a rose for me as best you can. Don't think of it as a whole rose, try and break it into the parts that make it a rose. How does it smell? What do the petals look like? And so forth.

[Dorian Longstreet]

I've tried this already Silv.... your metaphor is good, though I don't think it will get through to him.

[Silvador]

Dorian Longstreet wrote: I've tried this already Silv.... your metaphor is good, though I don't think it will get through to him. Negativity like that does not help.

-shoos Dorian away-

[Hoshiginiro]

i dont even know how to describe a rose's smell

[Silvador]

Hoshiginiro wrote: i dont even know how to describe a rose's smell Well, does it smell sweet? sour? Strong? Weak?

[furrynerd]

if i broke it down. theres more then a scent. a rose smells sweet. it feels thorny. sight its red and has a height.

but to do what you said. it smeels sweet and it smells strong depending on the size and amount of roses. the petals are round. it is red. its thorny if yo utouch it. that is a rose.

[Silvador]

And that is a good start. See? It's not that hard.

OK, we'll move onto something else.

You're in a room, furry, and there are two people there. I want you to describe them. What are they doing? What are they wearing? Are they sitting? Standing?

Go for it.

[Hoshiginiro]

my turn i walked up to this beautiful flower the sent was subtle but sweet it had soft silky red petals i went to pick this flower and i pricked my finger on a sharp thorn on the green stem it made me bleed the color of my blood is the same at the color of the flower i shall call this flower a rose

[furrynerd]

i have walked into a room. i see two people one a wolf and one a female house cat. the cat with black hair. bangs covering one eye. the wolf with long hair in a ponytail. "who are yo utwo people" he ask while he is surprised the cat was standing. but the wolf sitting down.

so how was that everyone

[Silvador]

Vague. You need to remember that you are trying to paint a picture with your words. Think of what else they are wearing. Are they talking softly? loudly? Where in the room are they? Is there a table or chair near them, perhaps? Are they maybe enjoying a drink?

[furrynerd]

ill edit it then.

[Silvador]

Don't worry about editing it, just try again.